robishott
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I was wondering if I could get some feedback as this is my first time in a fed.
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robishott
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Ouch. ok ok honesty is good. Sorry you didn't enjoy them I guess.
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Rob...
I've only just begun to work with you, but already I feel like that you have really sparked the creativity within me alone. I've only begun reading with the rp that you wrote in response to my first one with ND and DD.
So far man, I liked it. I feel like that maybe you could of played off a little more off my rp, but for the most part you have a good beginning for our thread. Its a good foundation. Standard structure, but it is a good start. But it was a enough to invoke some creativity of my own. I look foward to rping and pushing you to new levels as the week roles on man. In the end I hope that you will feel a lot better as an rper and have a deeper handle on Franklin as a whole.
As you read my second rp, I hope that you will see what I am attempting to do and I hope that through that it might bring your character further into the spotlight and bring out more juices of origionality within you.
Furthermore, I look forward to working with you and Justice in the coming week and who knows maybe spark into a long term program with you.
Feel free to PM on these boards if you have any questions or comments that we can take turns bouncing off one another.
Good luck man and I hope that you have fun rping against me as I am already starting have fun against you.
Patrick
(Nakita Dahaka & Delilah Demonik)
(Note/disclaimer: I am just writing a female character and playing her according to the vision that I have laid out for her. The way I play my female character do not reflect me in real life.)
I've only just begun to work with you, but already I feel like that you have really sparked the creativity within me alone. I've only begun reading with the rp that you wrote in response to my first one with ND and DD.
So far man, I liked it. I feel like that maybe you could of played off a little more off my rp, but for the most part you have a good beginning for our thread. Its a good foundation. Standard structure, but it is a good start. But it was a enough to invoke some creativity of my own. I look foward to rping and pushing you to new levels as the week roles on man. In the end I hope that you will feel a lot better as an rper and have a deeper handle on Franklin as a whole.
As you read my second rp, I hope that you will see what I am attempting to do and I hope that through that it might bring your character further into the spotlight and bring out more juices of origionality within you.
Furthermore, I look forward to working with you and Justice in the coming week and who knows maybe spark into a long term program with you.
Feel free to PM on these boards if you have any questions or comments that we can take turns bouncing off one another.
Good luck man and I hope that you have fun rping against me as I am already starting have fun against you.
Patrick
(Nakita Dahaka & Delilah Demonik)
(Note/disclaimer: I am just writing a female character and playing her according to the vision that I have laid out for her. The way I play my female character do not reflect me in real life.)
robishott
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I didn't steal it, if thats what you mean. I only wanted to establish a reason for the FTO belt being created.
Adam_Benjamin
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I honestly see the FTO as played out. I mean its much like the FTW belt from back in ECW. And honestly how can you sell your character as better than the organization based on you brief career.
robishott
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The FTO belt was made to show that Rob always gets his way, he felt like being champion so he made himself a champion. As for Rob being better than everyone, he is only doing his job as acocky heel. He needs no reason to think that he is better than the others.
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Rob,
Don't sweat it. You've already figured out some things that work and don't in e-fedding. You're off to a good start. Just continue to develop your character in the vision that you have for him, and try to work with the people you have matches against behind-the-scenes. You'll find that is the most enjoyable time.
If you need any more specific advice, I am always available by private message or through the MCW e-mail.
To Everyone:
I am reminding everyone that this is Rob's FIRST TIME IN ANY FED!!!!! Please work with him to make him better. I like what Patrick has already given to Rob as advice. Constructive criticism is what Rob is looking for.
We should all remember that we didn't start off knowing everything... so lets not all be dicks and act like we did.
Josh
Don't sweat it. You've already figured out some things that work and don't in e-fedding. You're off to a good start. Just continue to develop your character in the vision that you have for him, and try to work with the people you have matches against behind-the-scenes. You'll find that is the most enjoyable time.
If you need any more specific advice, I am always available by private message or through the MCW e-mail.
To Everyone:
I am reminding everyone that this is Rob's FIRST TIME IN ANY FED!!!!! Please work with him to make him better. I like what Patrick has already given to Rob as advice. Constructive criticism is what Rob is looking for.
We should all remember that we didn't start off knowing everything... so lets not all be dicks and act like we did.
Josh
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I really saw noone acting like a dick yet in here...
like I said he's really improving and I'm not *****ing about the conspiracy theme, but it didn't seem like he was feeding off other people's ideas for the first time. this may sound harsh, but I'm really not stating that to emberass him, punish him or anything. my only intention is that he can learn for the future. and why did I post all this? because I think some may have got the wrong impression from my second post in here. I didn't even want to write it, that's why I left it out the first post but then after reading Hell Fighter's post I changed my mind. and on purpose I avoided the word "(to) steal".
like I said he's really improving and I'm not *****ing about the conspiracy theme, but it didn't seem like he was feeding off other people's ideas for the first time. this may sound harsh, but I'm really not stating that to emberass him, punish him or anything. my only intention is that he can learn for the future. and why did I post all this? because I think some may have got the wrong impression from my second post in here. I didn't even want to write it, that's why I left it out the first post but then after reading Hell Fighter's post I changed my mind. and on purpose I avoided the word "(to) steal".