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    ASCENSION ARC Feedback Thread

    This is where the backs can be fed for this arc! Let us know what you thought!

    Keep in mind, there are no rules to feedback. You do not have to do a segment by segment run down, but EFFORT in this department is great for the community and product, AND still is a big part of discerning looks most rocket-able. You need a strong back for the rocket to be strapped too and that back is ... FEEDBACK! Boom. See what I did there?

    DEFtv 101: http://defiancewrestling.com/results/209
    DEFtv 102: http://defiancewrestling.com/results/210
    DEFtv 103: http://defiancewrestling.com/results/212
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    DEFtv 101


    OLD FRIENDS
    Wrote it. Fences are mended, but all manly like.

    RUNDOWN
    Wrote it with Ford.

    DEMAND TO FLEX
    Solid segment. Harmon is has to take the bald walk of shame before he can demand Elise?s head ? as the Faithful make fun of his. PCP coming out the Flex is different but it worked well between the reading of the note and the whispering in the ear. Some funny lines in here as well, which is pretty normal when it comes to anything Billy and Ford. This set up the next match as well let us know, Harmon isn?t done with Elise, not my a long shot.

    Jack Harmen vs. Flex Krueger
    The first joined in progress match I?ve seen in DEF! Certainly not something we want to overuse but with the match being a foregone conclusion at the end of the last segment, it?s perfect. Quick TV match, Alliterate Alliteration punchlines that you wouldn?t get if you were the set up, loved it. Harmen pulls the classic heel walk out and furthers the story between Jack and Elise. Good stuff.

    Angel Trinidad vs. Reinhardt Hoffman
    Angel striking out as a singles and makes quite the statement taking out Hoffman, one of BRAZEN?s best and at least in recent months the most seen on DEFtv. Hell, he was a part of WAR GAMES. Solid match, perfect for TV length and clearly this is a building block to something larger.

    TOO THE MAXX
    Sawyers here and in everything I?ve ever read, he is extremely annoying. So of course he?d be the perfect mouthpiece for this new heel team. Given the gimmick you can almost assume they can?t talk. This was a solid introduction to the team and I can?t wait to see more. Atomicdropcast.com

    Scott Douglas v. Scott Stevens /UNFINISHED BUSINESS
    Wrote it, with Stevens and Will.

    BREATH OF THE WILD
    Great Fuse Bro?s segment Perfect way to pull their story/direction out of the tailspin that was the closing. Roland always writes these too extremely entertaining and I?m glad to see them with the straps in what I?m foreseeing as a strong tag div. I kept waiting for the to drop a ?open world? reference directly but maybe that was better left not directly on the nose. What I assume is a nod to what happens when Mario Brothers starts over, was great - and the Princess deal was a good laugh. Good stuff.

    Brutal Force Attack Vs Toybox
    Second tag team debut of the night, in action this time rather than an interview. BAF hasn?t had the nicest ride since getting up to the main show, and coming out of the FUSE segment - the already in the ring (and you know what that means ? atomicdropcast.com) was a nice touch right off the bat. So far this show has a great feel continuity wise, feels like a real show. Solid debut from Toybox. I like that this wasn?t a complete squash and the debuting team still goes over - and give who they went against - no one was thinking any different. But this is the pro rassle graps and so this was a solid way to debut Toybox. Again, this Tag Div is looking strong!

    Good Luck? Champ
    Great segment, Stevens looks to be on his way out but can?t help but to be a prick while he does it. He sheds some UTA dead weight on his way out in the name of prickishness ? and the every so loveable Burns has bigger and better things on his mind. If this becomes something, perfect initial (re)contact and if it isn?t - it?s still little piece of world building that hypes the main event AND ties in to the continuity of Douglas/Stevens as well as the Rundown. Great work.

    NOTHING TO PROVE
    Wrote it.

    FIST: Cayle v. Oscar
    Fantastic match. Given circumstances, it had almost no build but I think the surprise of the match met with the ?surprise? of the finish worked perfectly. Hell of a match and especially for a TV main event at the start of an arc, I think they made this one feel big. Needless to say, no one wants to see Murr go but Cayle goes out looking like every bit of the champion he was and passes the torch to Burns (see what I did there.) This is the perfect jump start to a new era of DEF as it?s been called. After such a stellar title run as Cayle had Bruns has big shoes to fill but I have all the confidence in the world when it comes to Seth and his writing. And hopefully Murr will be back sooner than later. Great job, guys.

    OVERALL
    Successful show. I think commercials were a plus in aiding continuity and flow, all Tom's idea by the way! Matches were good TV length and no match felt like it was completely for nothing. My goal was ?100 percent ?? ? getting back to stability and business as usual and this was the step in that direction. Everyone came in hot and didn?t miss a step. We had very few late things and notice on most - show still went up a night earlier than normal. So, end all be all ? there is that. We had very few formatting issues, probably the biggest one is the centering of themes, which I know centering is long been an issue with the Backstage script, so no big beef there, but everyone try to be mindful of that. That being said, hopefully this continues and everyone does the beefs (it is important)! But yeah, great job, everyone. Let?s keep it rolling!

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    COLD OPEN Seg:
    Title (if known): Old Friends
    Who is Involved: Scott Douglas, Kerry Kuroyama
    *bare with me here, tbh last arc I was pretty much tuned out. Last I remember Kerry was Reaper Green, with a feud with Scott. So I know pretty much their history. Gather this segment easily meant to bring back their friendship. It will be interesting to see where Kerry goes from here.


    Seg:
    Title (if known): RUNDOWN
    Who is Involved: Angus, Keebs
    Writer: Brian/Tom
    *This helped catch me up a bit.

    SEG:
    Title (if known): TBD
    Who is Involved: Jack Harmen, Elise Ares, Flex Kruger
    Writer: Billy/Tom
    *Adding Flex to PCP, on top of which denying Jack his match with Elise unless he beats the newest member of the PCP. Good way to display Flex in a different light this time.


    MATCH:
    Who vs Who: Jack Harmen vs. Flex Krueger
    Writer: Tom
    *Jack refusing to play Ares game. Giving Flexy a win.


    MATCH:
    Who vs Who: Angel Trinidad vs. Reinhardt Hoffman
    Writer: Seth
    *So Seth if u can catch me up here, have Team Hoss split? In any case good hard hitting match by the two. Gonna be interesting to see where Angel goes from here.


    SEG:
    Title (if known): To The Maxx
    Who is Involved: To The Maxx W/ Jamie Sawyers
    Writer: Mikey
    *Jamie leaves the junkyard dog Hightower, and pledging to introduce a new tag team. Look forward to seeing them in action. Kind of got a bit of The Revival in Jamie's introduction look forward to seeing them in action...in 2 weeks.


    MATCH:
    Who vs Who: Scott Douglas v. Scott Stevens
    Writers: Brian, Stevens, Will
    *Stevens was rather brutal here, working over the SoHeR’s eyes, something you don’t see a focus as of much these days. It was a nice change, but man Stevens just continues to be one mean Texan. Douglas took a hell of a beating here.


    SEG:
    Title (if known): Unfinished Business
    Who is Involved: THE Jay Harvey, Scott Douglas, Scott Stevens
    Writer: Will, Brian
    *Ugh the Reaper(s), the only thing I could think of atm before the unveil was their departure mid arc. Thankful it was a rouse by good old THE Jay Harvey. And boy did Jay finish off Douglas after Stevens brutally beat him down. I can see this becoming a blood bath in the future. “Sidenote” just a little tweak i think ya should of added but probably was not involved in your plans. I would of teases it being Kerry beating him down as Reaper Green. Considering the earlier segment with Kerry and Scott, until Jay reveal but ah that's my train of thought. It worked how ya guys did it too.


    SEG:
    Title (if known): Breath of the Wild
    Who is Involved: Fuse Bros
    Writer: Roland
    *The Tag Champs trying to figure out what to do after becoming champs. Seems a bit odd, but I can see from their gimmick perspective how they would be stumped. Just seemed rather odd on first read.


    SEG:
    Title (if known): Good Luck?.Champ.
    Who is Involved: Scott Stevens and Oscar Burns
    Writer: Seth/Stevens
    *Stevens appears to be trying to get into Oscar’s head, maybe some mind games to take Oscar off his game when he faces Cayle later tonight. Stevens is just gold as a heel.


    SEG:
    Title (if known): Nothing to Prove
    Who is Involved: Scott Douglas, Kerry K, Terry Anderson
    Writer: Brian
    *I swear it has not gotten old Douglas sure spends a lot of time in the medical office. Kerry seems a bit upset with Scott not caring about Harvey’s beatdown of him, or the words of encouragement for him for 102 when he faces Harvey. Could there still be a bit of unresolved business between the two…?


    MATCH: CHAMPIONSHIP MATCH
    Who vs Who: Cayle Murray vs. Oscar Burns
    Writer: Seth
    *Hell of a match, all around technical spectacle. Did make me feel pretty good that CL elevate Oscar this high. Had a ear to ear smile when he won it. Gratz bud. Great main event

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    OLD FRIENDS
    Good to see fences mended.

    RUNDOWN
    Loved the rundown. Especially how they stressed the removal of the UTA stuff reminded me of WWE removing all WCW and ECW references when the Invasion lost and they were still using the titles.

    DEMAND TO FLEX
    Making Harmen wait to get the match he wants is classic booking 101. Good stuff.

    Jack Harmen vs. Flex Krueger
    Liked the ending. I wonder if we will see more of this from Harmen until he gets what he wants.

    Angel Trinidad vs. Reinhardt Hoffman
    Sucks to see Team HOSS split for now but excellent showing by Angel in his singles endeavors.

    TOO THE MAXX
    Jamie Sawyers needs a new meal ticket with Hightower gone so I'm looking forward to seeing where this new tag team goes and does.

    Scott Douglas v. Scott Stevens
    Hope you all enjoyed Scott Stevens last match in DEFIANCE.

    UNFINISHED BUSINESS
    Got to hate those Reapers. Don't know who could be under those masks. Lol. Good to see THE Gay Harvey back. ;-)

    BREATH OF THE WILD
    Loving the Fuse Bros. Enough said.

    Brutal Force Attack Vs Toybox
    Solid debut from the Toybox and great to see Jestal back. He was a very underrated character in UTA and I enjoyed working with him against him during our brief feud. Character has untapped potential.

    Good Luck? Champ
    Wrote it and then rewrote it thanks to some major critiquing from Brian and I greatly appreciate it. Hope you all enjoyed it.

    FIST: Cayle v. Oscar
    Hell of a match. Cayle has been a great champion taking on all comers and making not only the championship top notch but elevating a hot, young contender into a credible champion. Oscar made himself relevant by defeating Crimson Lord and establishing himself as the man by becoming the undisputed champion. Sucks to see Murray go IRL but he left the FIST in good hands.

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    Old Friends
    Scotty… (nods) Kerry and Scott are good to go, cleared the air. Good. This feels simple…. Simple is good.

    Run down.
    AWESOME! Good Stuff, Angus feels so fucking excited, good bit here for whomever wrote, this was a fun read and brought a smile to my Mikey face.


    Demand To Flex
    HAHAHAHAH PCP is giving Jack Harmen is giving the silent treatment, Flex Kruger is their new spokeflex. Nice set up for the match, love the silent gimmick. This was a lot of fun!


    Flex vs Harmen
    Wow, this was a surprise, Flex wins when Harmen walks away, even though he has Kruger exactly where he wants him at one point. Interesting…. Harmen has other plans. Intrigued.

    Angel Trinidad vs Reinhardt Hoffman.
    Fun little match, felt it was missing some sort of storyline but not every match has to be filled dwith drama. Angel gets the big win over a returning Hoffman. I can dig it. Well written and smooth match for sure.


    Too The Maxx
    Wrote this. Trying something new, Haven’t quite found the voice yet.


    Scott vs Scott
    Scott was really good in this match, but you gotta take your hat off to Scott on the other hand...wow! ;-)

    Stevens wins the match when Codename Reaper appeared. I thought Justin was gone? Interesting! Stevens “the only non contracted employee” I like that!


    Unfinished Business:
    OHhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh OK I bit on this. Good shit. Very DDP/La Parka! Harvey is under the codename reaper deal and is here to get what he wants the SOHER.

    Breath of the Wild:
    Hahaha fun little fuse bros segment the possibilities are endless! Good one. These characters are fun.


    BAF vs The Toybox
    Need the

    1…
    2…
    3… gimmick. Otherwise this was really fun. Im familiar with the characters from Utah, Scott does a great job using their size against them. Makes them more entertaining to read when you know they are a distinct disadvantage from the word jump. LOL Good stuff buddy, llooking forward to see how they transition all the way into DEF.

    Oh also, call a move by a “technical name” not another persons finisher. Example: Ghetto blaster. I didn’t know what that was, had to look it up. But if you would have said something like. Flying Enziguri or something I would have got it.


    Good Luck Champ….

    Scott Stevens and Oscar Burns have a little heated moment, Loved what Stevens did in the end here. Good schtuff. MAYBE….JUST MAYBE…. STEVENS isn’t leaving :P! Good stuff guys this played well.

    Nothing To Prove:
    AWEESOME Face Segment. GREAT reaction from Scott Douglas, YEA! Thats how you treat an annoying pissant! Loved this bit.

    Cayle Murray vs Oscar Burns


    Holy fuck what a match. Talk about Suplex City. This was a lot of fun, always weird reading face vs face, but this one works, ESPECIALLY with the “end of WrestleUTA angle” and the merging of the titles. Good writing here from Murrr and Seth, Seth is the new Fist, Congrats to murrr on his run. Hats off brotherman.



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    Gunter vs Angel
    Thought this was a nice match here.
    Gunther proved to be a challenge for Angel
    Nice flow throughout the match
    The post match interview answered my question about Team Hoss, which was great. Angel having a goal 8n mind and fighting for his son. Good CD work here.

    Steven's interview
    Steven's came off like his usual self a really prick
    Loved it, playing a free agent role is a interesting route to take Steven's whole maintaining his character during the invasion
    Good work bud

    Toybox interview
    Enjoy

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    Old Friends
    Like to see the staff used, like Iris. She seems like she’d be a great pediatrician, but a no-nonsense adult doctor. Glad to see Douglas and Kerry get back together. Might not have followed enough to get 96, but a solid restructuring of alliances as a cold open is good future fodder.

    Rundown
    This was primarily Brian. Like, 99% Brian. He’s got the voices down and the celebratory nature of DEFIANCE staying alive without McFuckass. Couldn’t have done it better with cliff notes and 100 monkeys typing on typewriters for 10 years.

    Demand to Flex
    Written by Billy and I. It’s a treat to write with Billy. Flex is a great mouthpiece. Paul Heyman levels.

    Kruger vs. Harmen
    I like having my guy “win” but have the decision overturn. Keeps heat on both dudes.

    Angel Trinidad vs. Reinhardt Hoffman
    Like the concept of these big men facing each other. Wanna see Reinhardt get some shine back, but like what this match does to build up Angel. Neither man really loses a step. Seth always writes an engaging graps, whether it’s tech or powerhouse or whatever. Seems Angel is flyin’ high this match though. Dropkicks and cross bodies. I expected more power graps. Where’s the DOC title again? Oh right, burnt at the stake by JFK.

    Too the Maxx
    Reminds me of the Vaudevillains meets the Revival. I hope it has a better run on DEF than either team has had on the main roster. Cowabunga.

    Scott Douglas vs. Scott Stevens/Unfinished Business
    Nice back and forth with a fubar ending. Love the concept of Harvey underneath the guise of the Reapers. Nice tie back without convoluting the story. Solid match that helps Stevens get a bit more over while keeping Douglas’ shine.

    The Fuse Bros - Breath of the Wild
    I hope they find their princess. It’d be cool to have a female manage them and try to, I dunno, challenge their worldview that this is all a video game? Be interesting no doubt. Straight men help preposterous concepts (not that I don’t enjoy Fuse, I love preposterous, why Klein wears a box). Of course, if Roland gets Renner to rehash the Codemaster I’m cool with them never saving the princess. Get on it :-)

    Brutal Attack Force vs. the Toybox
    I would also echo the statement that I had to look up what a Ghetto Blaster was, rather than just calling it an enzeguri. Granted, certain moves can be used based on their wrestling superstar (Rock Bottom is a Urangi, Stunner is a ? cradle sitdown neckbreaker), but the Ghetto Blaster didn’t translate through history of wrestling for me. (IN ADDITION - DEFIANCE doesn’t actually have the WWF or WCW as history in their timelines -- so there is no Rock, no Austin, no Flair, no nWo, no… what was it, bad news brown?) I like how their opponents under-estimated them and Toybox took the victory. Solid writing. Could lead to a future rematch too, which is always a good thing.

    Good Luck Champ
    I kinda wish Oscar said “gotta stop talking to yourself” and had someone else in frame who just stood silently, like… a Lance Warner… or even Klein, just waving happily to him. Either way, solid promo, even as it looks like Stevens is on his way out.

    Here is where I notice, I would have loved to have Cayle have a last promo before his match with Oscar, but we all know why that didn’t work out.

    Nothing To Prove
    I kinda wanna know how Iris is when she gets drunk. JUST SAYIN’ - UNCUT baby. Nice book end to the Cold Open, although I wouldn’t have minded a bit more of a personal / storyline payoff. Does the job of ensuring Kerry and Douglas’ issues are put to bed. Still, I imagine Iris can drink ‘em both under the table. Guess we ain’t gonna know.

    Cayle vs. Oscar
    Seth always writes fantastic pro graps, and he loves the technical nature of Burns. Fits like a glove with Cayle and his style. Burns gets a run of submissions and pins that winds up with Cayle bouncing on his head and we have a new championship. And Cayle does the right thing, shaking Oscar’s hand as he raises the FIST high. The titles coming together here was the drama, as it’s hard to have personal animosity when you have face versus face. But the match had heat and ups and downs, and that’s not only a testament to Seth’s writing, but both Cayle and Oscar as characters, and how they’ve progressed into their roles.

    OOC: Murr is a mensch, and go check out whatculture.

    Overall: I think commercial breaks are a good thing, and I’m glad to see the roster put forth a solid effort on our first post DEFtv 100 show. Thanks everyone.
    NFW World / LoC Legacy Champion Jack Harmen, Tony Davis, & Mary-Lynn Mayweather
    The Pop Culture Phenoms (The D, Klein w/ Elise Ares)
    NFW | Defiance | LoC | nbW

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    DEFtv 101

    old friends
    - not much was said in this but it was extremely effective with all these guys have been through. friends, then kerry going to the reaper co.

    intro - defiance seems to be on cloud nine with winning (ultimately) at the last ppv. nice to see burns is getting a title shot, very deserving since burns has been super hot as of late.

    demand to flex - a solid fucking segment here. harmen is all business and aries and the pcp make light of just well everything. sold the shit out of the hair loss on every level, the fans, the announce team, and pcp. good shit. we get out first match of the night out of this, a good impromptu martch.

    harmen vs flex - love the tactics from harmen. not playing the game like ares wants him to. harmen has been a great character and he continues to get better.

    trinidad vs hoffman - good match with trinidad getting the victory. looking to see what angel can do from here.

    too the maxx - kowabunga dude. nice preview segment for sawyers new tag team. the defiance tag team division was one of the highlights of the last 2 arcs, these guys are going to factor in in a big way imo. sawyers is a great mouthpiece and i can't wait to hear what he has to say after their first match.

    stoovinsvadouglas - stoovins had the advantage for most of this match, which is to be expected. douglas is a fighter and always seems to find a way back into things. The lights go out and things get more interesting. B is a workhorse, everyone knows. good shit from him.

    unfinished business - super easy to write, props to b for getting things together and making it a breeze.

    breath of the wild - those fuse bros. weird dudes but this segment sets up the fact that their quest isn't over, it's really just beginning. the tag teams are a force and the fuse bros need to stay on top of the heap.

    BAF vs the toy box - more tag teams?! the tag teams are running the show! nice to see jestal back in a wrestling ring. even those they look like clowns, smell like clowns, act like clowns... they r winners.

    good luck... champ... - fucking nice seeing these two face to face. i hope something comes out of this and quick. good job.

    nothing to prove - kerry wants to challenge harvey. douglas does a good job of shrugging harvey off. nicely done.

    burns vs murray - i found myself taken out of this for a minute because i 100% forgot about murr. it's been since a no brainer these past few months that cayle was the fist and thats just how it was. when i read burns won i went "holy shit" but then i realized why. burns is a deserving guy to be the new face of the company. a well written match and an awesome capper on cayle's time as champion.

    good job boys. i like where things appear to be headed.
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    DEFtv 102 feedback

    unleashed - so yeah. crimson lord is crazy. i've never been into this split personality thing from crimson if i can be honest. things look real bad until gage blackwood comes in to make the save for iris. the two, of course, get into things before being separated. this sets up the match that takes place in a bit.

    rundown - angus and keebs basically just comment about the previous segment and go into their match.

    blackwood vs crimson - loved this, solid story told. crimson lord bashes blackwood but gage shows what a fighter he is. i've been a fan of gage blackwood since i arrived and he's gaining more and more momentum with each arc. mushi makes the save at the end before blackwood could be any more injured.

    p-a-r-t-y? because i gotta! - burnsie gets his moment with the fans and goes on in a classic face champion way about defending the title and then, of course, he gets challenged right away! elise ares has been hot lately and she puts out the challenge, not before some heated rock-paper-scissor combat. solid segment with both serious and comedic tones to it.

    to the max vs the dibbins- to the max coming out of their debut with a victory. sawyers helps out and to the max are off running. good short match. i thought it was extra funny that mikey beat himself in this one.

    mystery box found - the toy box are making their claim for the tag titles in a very joker-esque segment. i love how dandellion doesn't talk and jestal just has convos with himself.

    harvey vs kuroyama - i wrote things!

    i told you... - i wrote another thing!

    the man in the mirror - goddamn these defiance tag teams are everywhere and that's not at all a bad thing. im psyched to see the interactions between these two teams, especially knowing the guys involved. plant those seeds, boys.

    the d vs harmen - jack harmen is doing everything right. he gives zero fucks right now and i like it.

    blokes and
    blokettes - everyone wants a piece of oscar burns, obvs. it never gets any easier when ur the big dawg. nice segment going over the upcoming match and angel wanting a shot at the next DEFtv.

    playing the game - kuroyama is injured, old man anderson isn't pleased with what's going on. solid backstage segment, selling the match before and the on going feud.

    burns vs ares - a real good match with a lot of back and forth. loved the pinning predicament spots that alternated between the two. harmen interferes and burns is able to retain. loved everything about this.

    another great shows bois. tag team division is still hot. the title pictures are hot. crimson lord is fucking crazy.

    EDIT: i didn't see the end of the show where stoovins attacked burns. my bad for that. the mask thing was already done with harvey. seems weird to do it the next show. i just hope these two title storylines don't seem like mirror images of each other.
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    UNLEASHED
    And Crimson Lord is up to some shit again, this time going off the rails and Gage Blackwood looks to be his next victim. I don't mind another segment being the cold open aside from the Rundown and this looks to be an interesting direction for Crimson Lord.

    RUNDOWN
    The Rundown goodness continues. I kind of laughed at FIST and Turns Oscar Burns sign thinking it was an inappropriate joke until I remembered... duh, right, I have the title.

    CRIMSON LORD VS. GAGE BLACKWOOD
    A good win to get Crimson Lord back to his badass self. And I am most intrigued about the post-match. Mushi NEEDS to get back to form with a good feud to sink his teeth into and I think him and Crimson Lord hossing it up can be great. More of this, please.

    P-A-R-T-Y? BECAUSE I GOTTA!
    I writed dis with Billy and Ford. We put words on the pages and hopefully fun was had by all.

    TO THE MAXX VS. THE DIBBINS BROUSINS
    Hahaha, this was great and I fucking love this team already, Mikey. The tag team division looks fucking great and I can't tell you how bad I want to get back into it, but sadly this will have to wait.

    MYSTERY BOX FOUND!
    This worked on every level and I told Scott this already, but I love The Toybox already as grand shit disturbers and can't wait for The Fuse Bros/Toybox feud to progress.

    Side note, I think I'd love to see a stable of Crimson Lord with Toybox as grand shit disturbers of DEFIANCE.

    THE JAY HARVEY VS KERRY KUROYAMA
    This was a very well-written match and enjoyed Kuroyama getting to look strong before THE Jay Harvey rightfully ran him down. Harvey is one of our best heels going right now and with DEFIANCE getting to continue, I hope he really has a chance to thrive.

    I TOLD YOU...
    And I can tell that thriving is already happening with this feud with Scott Douglas. This was fucking great and I love this feud. I don't think I fellate this feud any more, but this has been awesome.

    THE MAN IN THE MIRROR
    More tag team goodness and I love it. And both of these teams seem tailor-made for feuding with one another, as do Fuse Bros and Toybox. This has all the potential to be really good, too.

    JACK HARMEN VS. THE D
    A Tom Ford Guy vs. A Tom Ford Guy! Oh, the humanity!

    ...This was great and I absolutely love the "Give No Fucks" Harmen we've been seeing since the tail end of the UTA invasion.

    I didn't touch on this from 101's feedback, but I fucking loved Flex Kruger being part of the group and I hope we get more of that if possible.

    BLOKES AND BLOKETTES
    I also writed dis.

    PLAYING THE GAME
    Decent follow-up for the Douglas/Harvey drama from earlier. No way Douglas is gonna let this slide. If he did, then it probably wouldn't be professional wrestling.

    BURNS VS. ELISE
    I writed this (with small assist from Billy). Hope you all enjoyed it and the post-match to set the tone for the remainder of the arc.


    Overall, these last two shows in the new era have been easy reads and flowed very well. I like that all three title divisions have good angles surrounding them now with the non-title feuds being just as interesting. Let us keep doing great things.
    Team HOSS - DEFIANCE
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    unleashed – Nice opener to set up a match later on, but not sure what to make of Crimson talking to himself and ranting about crayons when he’s a stone cold killer who enjoys hurting people for fun.

    rundown - angus and keebs basically just comment about the previous segment and go into their match.

    blackwood vs crimson – Loved this match. Story telling was on point and showed the Crimson we all know and love and how Gage continues to be an underrated talent ready to break out. The reverse finish reminds me of Shamrock and Rocky.

    p-a-r-t-y? because i gotta! – Classic face championship promo. Well written and sets the tone for the Main Event and that Oscar wants to be a fighting champion.

    to the max vs the dibbins- Enjoyed the match but I thought the Dibbins got too much offense in for my liking and kind of watered down the victory of the hyped up new tag team.

    mystery box found – I’m a Jestal mark. Loved the character from back from UTA and glad to see the trademark smiles being applied to someone else not named Scott Stevens. Lol. I like the act and the conversations between the siblings. It’s creative and unique and know they have a focus and that spells disaster for the tag champs.

    harvey vs kuroyama – Jay Harvey being Jay Harvey. Good stuff.

    i told you... – Top feud in DEFIANCE right now.

    the man in the mirror – Seeds have been planted.

    the d vs harmen – Love the D….wait a minute…..didn’t mean to say it like that….get your mind out of the gutter people!!!! Enjoyed this match. The D is a character I’m becoming a fan of and I’m waiting for Harmen to just completely snap out.

    blokes and blokettes
    – Everyone wants a piece of the champion and Angel wants to test his mettle against the FIST and with his recent success why not challenge the top guy when you’re the Guru of HOSSness.

    playing the game – Solid segment.

    burns vs ares – Good back and forth match with lots of near falls you would expect in a high profile match. The Harmen drive by was well executed. Enjoyed it.

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    UNLEASHED
    Yellow crayon = Oscar burns
    Silver crayon - Iris davine
    Outer Space Crayon = Gage Blackwood
    Lime Green Crayon = Chris Ross
    And I have officially lost my cotton pickin mind

    CRIMSON LORD VS. GAGE BLACKWOOD
    When I read Will’s match...I want to go to DEFIANCE Labor relations about Benny Doyle being prejudice to seven footers

    P-A-R-T-Y? BECAUSE I GOTTA!
    Oscar with a good first promo as champion, The PCP seem to take a bit long, but it kind of reminded me of Goku and Vegeta deciding who fights was a nice twist on a group debat

    TO THE MAXX VS. THE DIBBINS BROUSINS
    Eric wilson I got a feeling is going to be my fav of this team. Loved the match, To the Maxx makes a impressive debu here look forward to seeing this team develop in the coming shows

    MYSTERY BOX FOUND!
    You know what your problem is reader?

    THE JAY HARVEY VS KERRY KUROYAMA
    Fuck you Benny Doyle! Prejudice to us seven foot monsters! I liked the match and the ruthlessness of Jay….but given the ending CL did the same thing to Gage, and Benny quickly reversed his decision whereas he sort of let Jay have his way. Again not much ya can do here given the circumstances

    I TOLD YOU...
    I swear me,rob,will,brain knew nothing of our plans this week. This with a slight adjustment was exactly what me and rob did earlier….great minds think alike I suppose

    THE MAN IN THE MIRROR
    The seeds of a potential rivalry in the future have been planted. I dig it

    JACK HARMEN VS. THE D
    Well, Jackie is off his rocker, poor D and Klien being hsi personal punching bag. Surprised he just didn’t deck Carla while he was at it. Love the YO ADRIENNE! I DID IT! Line by D lmao

    BLOKES AND BLOKETTES
    Oscar just continues to pick up where Cayle left off, now Angel wants a piece. This guy better slow down before he burns out.

    PLAYING THE GAME
    Douglas and Kerry spending quality time with Iris again...Eventually Douglas is going to have to play Jay’s game, Jay better be ready for it cause I got a feeling Scott to give Jay everything he has coming to him.

    BURNS VS. ELISE
    Another classic here, Oscar has turned up the notch since becoming champion, far more different style then when he was up against CL for the last few months. Good balance between a intergender match up too nothing really unbelievable great job. I knew it that prick Stevens was not going anywhere...he seemed to interested in Burns, and his hot streak, to just leave it alone.



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    FEELING STROPY
    Enjoyed Oscar's parts, although Steven's snorting cocaine was a bit too much. Alot of his dialog came off rather childish. Not the Steven's I have enjoyed so far.

    OSCAR BURNS VS. STEVENS DYNASTY
    This really did not flow well with me either. You would thinking after snorting all the drugs not even five minutes ago, Steven's would not be in any condition to really be much of a threat...then again I never did any of what he did previous segment. Oscar challenging both angel and Bo in a triple threat seems way out in left field. Usually situations like what happens it would lead to a tag team match playa. So Burns making it a triple threat just came off weird. Sorry fellas so far this show just not feeling it between the two

    COLOR COMMENTARY
    Nice rundown of the show, and rundown of what happened with stevens, angel and oscar

    DANDELION VS. TYLER FUSE
    Wrote hope ya like

    THE AVENGER
    This was a good build to mushi/cl match later. Connecting shows is always a good plus, something I enjoyed in Oscar's promo earlier bringing the unwatched uncut to forefront

    PCP VS DUBBINS
    Good tag match with a tease by To The Maxx. Glad they just teased rather than quickly move into a brawl.

    ACT II ANOTHER MONTAGE
    after I finished this idk how I felt about it specifically the last two lines of it seem to end abruptly. See what u guys thought.

    BREAK THE SILENCE
    This was a damn good segment here. You could literally feel the emotion coming from Elise toward Jack. Very well done fellas.

    THE BRUV SHOW
    AH YA MY BOY JFK BACK! Love the idea of having a talk show in Defiance. Gives a new median to work on stories. Only thing I probably would of added is faking Douglas theme song with him not showing up and the three could have a laugh at the faithfuls expense. But that's just me loved the segment regardless.

    CRIMSON LORD VS MUSHIGIARA
    Wrote the ending to it, didn't expect it to be too long saving it for the big show.

    FLASH FROM THE PAST
    Decent promo, laying out the challenge for PCP.

    BURNS VS. ANGEL VS BO
    Hell of a match, Burns is able to survive….but Steven's is going to wait a year to challenge for the title? Next ppv is Accession not Acts of Defiance



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    deftv 103 backfeed

    feeling stroppy
    loved the burns portion of the segment, classic face champion style. when stevens comes in it loses momentum a little. him doing blow off some bitches tit is unnecessary here, do that in a promo/propaganda. there it would be more fitting. that took me out of it but stoovins putting in his family to challenge burns is an okay wrinkle. the night starts off blazin'

    burns vs bo
    match is going a long, of course the all 16 (i kid) of the stoovins' have to do some fuckery and angel trinidad comes out to even the odds and the match gets turned into a triple threat later in the night. i didn't hate this turning into a triple threat but it did make me scratch my head.

    color commentary
    finally some sort of rundown.

    fuse vs dandelion
    solid match right here. classic fuckery from the heel tag team, face takes his eyes off his opponent and then pays for it. this feud is getting hot and i like it.

    the avenger
    good promo setting up this upcoming match. dante lays it down for crimson lord and these two monsters will battle later on in the night.

    pcp vs the dibbins
    short and sweet.

    another montage
    this was pretty funny. i had to read it a twice but it was real good. i member scott doing something like this in wrestleuta with jestal. i'm not 100% sure why burns was involved... Besides that this seeed to fit more of a face character than these shit-heels that have been attacking the fuse bros week after week. i guess blur the lines.

    break the silence
    this segment seemed emotional between the characters involved. jack harmen continues to be the best heel and possibly character in the company. i can't wait for this match to happen.

    the bruv show
    woo!

    mushi vs crimson lord

    crimson lord gets the win but this war is far from over. lord goes for the brass knucks and gets himself a count out victory. kind of out of character for lord but it reminded me of something kevin nash would do.

    flash from the past
    that promo was fire. mikey hasn't lost a step and to the max are gunning for pcp. the defiance tag division has continued to be the top story for the last 2-3 arcs. i'm super excited for all of these matches.

    bo vs bruns vs angel
    lots of false finishes and times where you thought burns was going to lose. burns retains and stevens puts him out after the final bell. stoovins and burns for the FIST at... acts of defiance? did i miss something?

    good show guys.
    love ya pete

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