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    The White Tigress Yi

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    Name: Anthony S.
    Email Address: Zlife17@gmail.com
    Best Way to Contact You: Email and Skype (user on profile)
    eWrestling Experience: This would be a new experience for me but I'm hungry for criticism and to learn
    How did you find DEFIANCE? FWrestling.com I've lurked in guest mode and want to jump in fully
    Are you willing to write matches? I sure am! I just hope they are acceptable to everyone

    Writing Sample

    This is an brand new sample I hope it isn't to horrible. I tried to not make her sound like a tweener because of the guidelines but will revise if I failed.

    The interview area of the Wrestle-Plex is abuzz with talk before a well dressed man holding a mic cleared his throat signaling the crew to go silent and prepare for the segment.Lance Warner smiled into the camera as he adjusted his glasses briefly before starting his speech, the stone-faced Asian female standing beside him offering no comfort only an awkward silence.
    The camera-man signaled they where going to be going live in any moment and Lance smirked at his interviewee still trying to gage her.

    Her dark red hair styled in a Chinese bob with white streaks dyed along the length of the long bangs. Her outfit consisted of a black princess vest a stylized white tiger head over her heart, the outlines of the pockets a bright white. Her wresting tights where a simple matte black along with her boots. This whole ensemble was topped off with the massive white tiger pelt belt she had wrapped around her waist the buckle a golden paw.

    Lance: Hello and thank you for tuning in this evening! I’m Lance Warner and tonight I am honored to introduce The Tigress Zhang Y-

    Yi: The WHITE Tigress

    Her words while not showing any confusion where heavily coated with her accent showing she was from some eastern country

    Lance: Ahem I of course meant The White Tigress Zhang Yi! So Yi.....Yi is fine right?

    Yi simply nodded as she stared at the announcer

    Lance: Well Yi this is your first time entering the Wrestle-plex as a active member of the roster and the world wants to know...what makes you different than the current female talent?

    Yi seemed to ponder the question for a moment before she raised her right hand up to the announcers ear and clenched her fist slowly multiple loud pops audible to the audience. She smirked and then flexed the already raised arm showing her toned muscle before slowly dropping it down.

    Yi: Skill.....Raw power....What else would I need?

    Lance: Very....direct some would say overconfident but if your story is anything to base you from I would say your a prime example of the old adage "A String of facts does not lead to the truth". Is it not a fact you a child of a low income home in china, only daughter of two hard working farm hands pushed yourself on until you not only moved here to the land of opportunity but also became a Olympic hopeful in both weightlifting and wrestling?

    Yi beamed and nodded slowly as she seemed to be enjoying the positive write-up she was receiving from the veteran reporter.

    YI: Yes...much hard work and many late nights by self in the gym

    Lance: Is it not fact that you not only focused on physical power but also gained your degree in Zoology specializing in large cats?

    Yi: Yes I've studied cats... VERY powerful hahaha

    The woman smiled and roughly patted the announcers back in a racking motion but didn't seem to have a malicious or combative resoning

    Yi: Enough talking yes? I have very important talk with a Mista..Hurley to get a contract

    The Woman gave the announcer a soft smirk once again and then wandered off past the bewildered man and humming a simple tune.

    Lance: W-Well There you have to people! A very......unique look into the views of the next potential DEFIANCE superstar Zhang Yi! I am sure we will be seeing her power her way through the competition in weeks to come


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    Ring Name: Zhang Yi (AKA: The White Tigress)
    Height: 5'7
    Weight:157 lbs.
    Birthdate: May 3rd 1992


    Hailing From: San Diego, California

    Alignment: Face

    Theme song: Walk by Pantera

    Gimmick: A Very stoic and determined woman Yi isn't one to complain when the odds are stacked against her or to show her true mood to those she doesn't know. Despite her lack of apparent social skills she is clearly a avatar for justice and making sure everyone knows its unforgiving sting if they cross her.

    Wrestling Style: Yi is a mostly seen as a brawler in the squared circle but her impressive frame and strength makes her easily able to pull off various powerhouse-esque moves when its called for.

    Three Weaknesses:

    Bad mic ability-Being a none native English speaker and a normally unsocial person Yi prefers to keep her time on the mic short and if possible having someone act as her stand in

    Green- Yi is new to this level of the industry and for now it shows in her in-ring performance

    Hot blooded- Yi is quick to anger and will lash out on whoever she sees as the reason for her not achieving a easy victory. She has ben known to do an illegal move in these situations the anger over powering her normal mindset

    Three Strengths:

    Strength- Before entering the world of the squared circle Yi was a Olympic hopeful in both weightlifting and freestyle wrestling, she hopes to be able to use these as tools

    Aggression- While not one to pick a fight (or how she sees it anyway) Yi can damn well put the anger of a wild tiger into her eyes and her fists quick to maul her target with blows

    Balance- Yi has the balance of cat on the ropes and isn't one to fumble off the top rope or preforming something involving the mid-rope
    MOVESET

    Ten regular moveset moves:

    1)Leapfrog
    2)Mongolian chop
    3)Mounted punches
    4)Flying lariat
    5)Battering ram
    6)Spinning heel kick
    7)Uppercut (Normally an irish whip rebound)
    8)big splash
    9)Brain buster
    10)Back elbow

    2-5 trademark moves:

    1) (Sudden strike) Spin kick into a rebounding opponent aimed at the gut
    2)(Justice slam) Torture rack bomb
    3) (Mauling) Spear into mounted punches until official breaks it up

    Finishing Moves: )
    Tiger bite- Sitout spinebuster into the pin (only when physically possible)
    Pounce-Face Breaker DDT to stagger the opponent before following with a clothesline
    Last edited by mikadova; 11-26-17 at 11:51 PM. Reason: adding some contact info

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    Re: The White Tigress Yi

    I don't think the character is bad. Could use a little work but mostly isn't bad AT ALL! If your brand new to the hobby - stellar effort!

    I would suggest though, read some cards to get a feel of the larger picture of the Angle side of the hobby and then give your writing sample another go. I won't say it's completely without merit but both it readability and in format, it leaves a lot to be desired. BUT that, again - could be easily fixed reading a few DEFtvs, and Uncuts to get a feel for how it's written around here.

    I think you may have the right idea and attitude; but I think we, or at least I just need to see more from the writing sample then I have.

    Don't be put off though. Give the writing sample another shot.

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    Re: The White Tigress Yi

    Thank you! I will certainly read a few more and get a better idea of how it goes

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    Re: The White Tigress Yi

    I'm all for someone new to e-wrestling in general joining. The character concept is cool. I agree maybe adding a bit more writing but I think it's a good start. My thumb is leaning up.

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    Re: The White Tigress Yi

    from some of the moves you have included your character acts kind of heelish. cut the throat thrusts and eye rakes and you are going in the right direction to being a baby face. Right now DEFIANCE is needing of a new baby face, especially a foreign one.

    iconcur with brian , a new writing sample would be nice. although this piece isn't bad there’s nothing to it. We don’t get any kind of feel for the character. This is essentially an entrance for yi.

    Go back and possibly go with her first time in front of a DEFIANCE camera, whether it be a contract signing or her talking about what got her to this point in her career. Now with her lack of english, go minimalist. Less is more.

    love ya pete

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    Re: The White Tigress Yi

    So do you think that I should adjust those heelish moves or simply saying they where leaning on that part of the spectrum? When I wrote them in a I was sorta playing to the temper she has not really being one to do those move when she feels the fight is fair.

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    Re: The White Tigress Yi

    Thank you Roland I am working on the re write as I type!

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    Re: The White Tigress Yi

    In regards to the moveset I have to agree, the moves are heelish and you specifically mention things about the ref being distracted.

    In my opinion you should turn those moves into a weakness and reword your 'hot blooded' weakness to include your character can lose her temper and act in a way that doesn't represent "justice". Internal conflict baby faces are great and we need more.

    You seem willing to address concerns we have, I too am leaning towards a yes.
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    Re: The White Tigress Yi

    When I posted I didn't see the new write up. While it could use a little work it's a very positive foot forward to representing your character. I hope you get a chance.

    You have a yes from me.
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    Re: The White Tigress Yi

    Character has potential, I think you've addressed the concerns that were previously raised - it's a yes from me.

    Just a note going forward, however - descriptive bits on the show are written in present tense; your sample was written in past tense. No problem with your sample, just an FYI for when you write things.
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    Re: The White Tigress Yi

    just the fact that you didn't get defensive and take any criticism to heart makes me want to say yes. the revised promo is better. i think with a character like this you are going to have to work more on mannerisms and body language to get her over. smacking turnbuckles and screams in the ring to pump up the crowd.
    love ya pete

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    Re: The White Tigress Yi

    The character itself is an interesting concept and I'd love to see it come to fruition. Though with so many larger wrestlers in the fed I question how she'd be able to perform her finisher. A secondary finisher might not be a bad idea. Don't be afraid to take inspiration from other wrestlers in the real world. I'm getting a little bit of an Asuka vibe from what I'm reading. I'm not saying rip off a character completely but ya know take some aspects and mold it into your own.

    Regardless it's good to see new blood come into this hobby so I say let's give this person a shot. We're all willing to help as needed.

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    Re: The White Tigress Yi

    I vote yes.

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    Re: The White Tigress Yi

    Thank you all for your constructive criticism and advice!
    I'm just so happy to have found something that mixes my two favorite things together and hope I do them justice
    I plan on adjusting the move set after this is posted

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    Re: The White Tigress Yi

    As mentioned above you rolled with the punches and made adjustments and that attitude goes ALONG way here. We'll have to get you paired with someone a little more established for your first arc and I think that'll help alot.

    Definitely get on skype it'll be your life line starting out.

    I vote yes.

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